Comment on this that I wrote, i am 13?

Wow this is excellent! Your description is beautiful, but are you trying to describe yourself? I noticed the best poems come from you writing about somebody else. Somebody whose features aren't all perfect, but they are still beautiful. This girl sounds young, if she is indeed young than why is her hair color the color of ash? I find this really beautiful, I don't know why the other answers find this average for a thirteen year old. I know Stanford students who can't write as well as you.